
中考写作话题
环境保护( Environmental Protection)
重要性★★★★★
1.Susan说为了排到她最喜欢参观的座位,她不介意等一个小时。
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2.Tony是一个环保工程师。今天他有一个新项目要做(to do)。
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3.做任何事情都不要依赖运气,否则什么事都不会成功。( doing)
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【答案】
1. Susan said she didn’t mind waiting for an hour to get a seat in her favourite restaurant.
2. Tony is an engineer to look after the environment. Today he has a new project to do.
3. Don’t rely on luck in doing anything , or you will succeed in nothing.
Recently there has been a discussion about the topic “Water is precious ” in your class. Please write at least 60 words about the topic “Water is precious” to express your point of view.
(请以《水是珍贵的》为题,写一篇至少60个词的作文,标点符号不占格。
你的作文内容必须包含一下几点:
1. Why is water very important in our life?
2. What are the causes of the water shortage?
3. How can we protect our precious water resources?
篇章书写
★审(Read)
从作文标题“Water is precious”中可得知,主要的写作内容应为水是珍贵的,再根据题干中所给提示: 1. Why is water very important in our life? 2. What are the causes of the water shortage? 3. How can we protect our precious water resources? 将书写方向定为: 1水在我们生活中非常重要的原因是...... 2. ....... 导致了水资源的短缺。3.我们可以通过......的方式来保护水资源。
★写( Write)
根据之前所讲写作步骤:作文题目一写作框架一添加素材一初稿,
Step1
初稿
作文题目
①
②
③
写作框架
开篇
中间
结尾
即可进行如下书写步骤的拆解:
开篇: Water is important
because ...
中间:The causes of the shortage are that ...
结尾:We can protect our precious water resources by ...
1.Why is water very important in our life?
2.What are the causes of the water shortage?
3.How can we protect our precious water resources?
接下来,我们需要思考,涉及到环保类话题时,可以运用那些词汇及句式,才会使文章的内容变得更丰富。
词汇大搜罗
名词:
1. earth 2. importance 3. life 4. people
5. tap 6. thing 7. water
动词:
1. can 2. die 3. drink 4. get
1. keep 6. know 7. live 8. must
9. need 10. put 11. realize 12. run
13. save 14. stop 15. throw 16. use
形容词:
1. bad 2. clean 3. dirty 4. important
副词:
1. off 2. possibly 3. recently 4. still
5.usually
连接词及短语大搜罗
表转折:
but, yet, while, however
表层次:
first(ly), second(ly), third(ly)
表总结:
in a word, in brief, to sum up
常见句型大搜罗
1.As we all know, ... 众所周知,.......
2.Some people are still unaware of ... 有些人还没有意识到.......
3.We must do something to ...我们必须要做一些事情去
4.Water is important to all of us. 水对于我们每个人都很重要
5.Let’s ...让我们.......
运用以上单词、连接词以及句式,就可以在已写出的文章框架(开篇、中间、结尾)的中心句基础上,添加必要的写作素材,从而形成文章的初稿,如下:
初稿:
Water is precious
As we all know, water is very important in our life.However, people didn't realize the importance of it until recently. A person will die without drinking water, but some people are still unaware of the importance of saving it. They usually keep the water running after using it or throw dirty things into it. In fact, we must do something to stop it from getting worse if we live on the Earth. Firstly, switch off the tap after using it. Secondly, keep the water clean by not throwing anything dirty.Thirdly,reusing the water is also needed. To sum up, water is important to all of us; let's try our best to save it.
★美( Beautify)
根据之前所讲的写作步骤,初稿——包装句子
Step 2
初稿
包装句子
则可发现,文章在句式方面出现了如下问题:
初稿:
Water is precious
As we all know, water is very important in our life¹. However, people didn't realize the importance of it until recently². A person will die without drinking water³, but some people are still unaware of the importance of saving it. They usually keep the water running after using it or throw dirty things into it⁴. In fact⁵, we must do something⁶ to stop it from getting worse if⁷ we live on the Earth. Firstly, switch off the tap after using it. Secondly, keep the water clean by not throwing anything dirty.Thirdly,reusing the water is also needed. To sum up, water is important⁸ to all of us; let's try our best to save it.
1.五大基本句型。
2.五大基本句型×2。
3.五大基本句型×3+缺乏论据。
4.五大基本句型×4。
5.短语使用过于简单。
6.五大基本句型×5。
7.简单条件状语从句的使用。
8.五大基本句型×6.
准终稿:
Water is precious
①As the proverb says: "Water is the source of life. " However, ②it was not until recently that people begin to realize the importance of it. ③According to scientists, a person can't live if he doesn't drink water for more than 7 days, ④simply because all the cells in our body live on water. But some people are still unaware of the importance of saving it. ⑤Forgetting to switch off the tap or even throwing dirty and poisonous things into it has been a common phenomenon. ⑥Frankly speaking, ⑦it's a must for us to do something to stop it from getting worse ⑧as long as we live on the Earth. Firstly, switch off the tap after using it. Secondly, keep the water clean by not throwing anything dirty.Thirdly, reusing the water is also needed.To sum up, water ⑨is of great importance to all of us;let's try our best to save it.
以上修改过程中,主要用到了如下单词及句型:
超纲词汇大搜罗
1.cell n.细胞;电池
2.switch v.关闭;转换;转变
拓展;switch off关闭
3.poisonous adj.有害的;有毒的
4.frankly adv.坦白的直率的
高分句式大搜罗
名人名言:
As the proverb says:” Water is the source of life.”
译为:俗话说:“水是生命之源”
强调句:
It was not until recently that...
译为:“直到最近.......”
固定句式;
According to scientists , ...
译为:“据科学家称.......”
固定句式——副词+句子:
Simply because
译为:“仅仅因为.......”
★查( check)
根据之前所讲写作步骤:包装句子—检查语法—成文,改正语法错误。
Step 3
成文
包装句子
检查语法
所有步骤完成后,即可形成文章终稿,如下:
终稿:
Water is precious
| As the proverb says: " Water is the source of life." However, it was not until recently that people begin to realize the importance of it. According to scientists, a person can't live if he doesn't drink water for more than 7 days, simply because all the cells in our body live on water. But some people are still unaware of the importance of saving it. Forgetting to switch off the tap or even throwing dirty and poisonous things into it has been a common phenomenon. Frankly speaking,it's a must for us to do something to stop it from getting worse as long as we live on the Earth. Firstly, switch off the tap after using it. Secondly, keep the water clean by not throwing anything dirty. Thirdly, reusing the water is also needed. To sum up, water is of great importance to all of us; let's try our best to save it. |
