
with green leaves on the top. Attracted by the delicious leaves, the snail immediately sets about climbing. It tries its best but still fails to get to the top. It falls off the tree and bumps(碰撞) into the ground, painful and dizzy. Nevertheless(然而), it doesn’t lose heart. It raises its spirits(打起精神) to try once more, successfully gaining its delicious dish this time.
revealed/conveyed in the picture is evident, that is, we are supposed to be determined enough to reach our goals. It is the strong mind that contributes to the little snail’s success. Without determination, it would be impossible for it to get the fascinating leaves. The same goes for(对于…...也一样) us human beings. As the proverb goes, “Man is made of blood and flesh, and a special fiber(纤维) called determination.” Determination is the precursor(先驱) to success.
From my perspective(视角), all of us ought to have determination. It helps us to be strong-minded to overcome the obstacles ahead, especially when we are on a tough road. With determination, we can be motivated(促动,激发) to chase our dreams(追逐梦想) and to perform better in study. Hence(因此) don’t be afraid of failure — be determined! Remember, our aims will be unquestionably attained!
二. 如何写高分作文?
一篇作文的优劣,无论是记叙文、议论文、说明文还是夹叙夹议,都可以简单地从以下几个方面是否运用适当甚至是活用来判断(以上面这篇作文为例):
1. 词(动、名、形、副、连接词等等):fail to do sth., reveal, convey, go, motivate, perform, attain; delicious, painful, dizzy, evident, determined, fascinating, strong-minded, tough; immediately, successfully, especially, unquestionably; nevertheless, that is, from my perspective, hence
词的运用应丰富、多样,而且不能只限于动词和名词,形容词和副词的使用能增加文章的准确性和生动性;连接词的使用可以使文章结构严谨、自然流畅、富有节奏。
2. 短语:set about doing, fall off the tree, bump into the ground, lose heart, raise one’s spirits, be supposed to, reach one’s goals, contribute to(促成),overcome the obstacles ahead, chase one’s dreams, perform better in study
请尽量使用高中学的短语!初中学的短语相对比较浅显,不足以成为亮点。
3. 句式:with… on the top, It is … that…, Without…, it would be…,The same goes for, As a/the proverb goes
作文还可运用同学们平时学的定语从句、状语从句、名词性从句、强调句、倒装句等等。但不可只用长句。长句表述具体,说理严密;短剧简洁明快、精炼扼要,明白易懂。既然各有所长,在写作时就应根据实际需要,交替使用简单句、并列句和复合句,以达到“长短错落有致,句式丰富多样”的效果。
4. 非谓语:attracted(状语), gaining(状语), revealed/conveyed(定语)
非谓语动词简洁明快、节奏紧凑、表意灵巧,是帮你拿高分的必杀技。
5. 名人名言、经典名句、谚语俗语:使用科学家、作家、诗人、政治家(如莎士比亚、泰戈尔、海伦凯勒、培根、肯尼迪等等)的名人名言或经典名篇中的佳句,绝对“高端大气上档次,低调奢华有内涵”,对于提升立意具有立竿见影之功效。(注:上面的学生习作第二段引用的谚语恐怕是学生自己编滴^_^)谚语言简意赅、寓意深刻、富有哲理和智慧,也是写作必备的必杀技之一(但是如Where there is a will, there is a way. 或Rome was not built in a day.或Every coin has two sides.已经被用得太滥,用在作文中不但不会帮你加分,反而会影响作文分数的提升),大家平时一定要注意积累和挑选。
P.S.: 虽然高考的词数要求是120左右,但近几年高考的评卷往往是写少了扣分,写多不扣,所以请尽量把试卷的横线写满,或至多剩一、两行,写多更能体现考生词汇的丰富以及语言运用能力,但切不可写得多于提供的横线。另外,一定要书写漂亮整洁,否则难拿高分!请尽量打草稿!
二.名人名言1
1. 莎士比亚William Shakespeare:Do not, for one repulse, give up the purpose that you resolved to effect. 不要因为一次失败,就放弃你原来决心想达到的目的。
2. 爱因斯坦 Albert Einstein:The ideals which have lighted my way, and time after time have given me new courage to face life cheerfully have been kindness, beauty and truth. 有些理想曾为我们引过道路,并不断给我新的勇气以欣然面对人生,那些理想就是真善美。
3. 歌德Goethe(德国诗人戏剧家)The important thing in life is to have a great aim, and the determination to attain it. 人生重要的事情就是确定一个伟大的目标,并决心实现它。
4. Leo Tolstoy, Russian writer(作家托尔斯泰): Ideal is the beacon. Without ideal, there is no secure direction; without direction, there is no life. 理想是指路明灯。没有理想,就没有坚定的方向;没有方向,就没有生活。
5. 大仲马Davy de la Pailleterie, French writer(法国作家): Living without an aim is like sailing without a compass. 生活没有目标就像航海没有指南针。
6. 查理卓别林Charlie Chaplin:You have to believe in yourself. That’s the secret of success. 人必须相信自己,这是成功的秘诀。
4. 富兰克林罗斯福Franklin Roosevelt(美国前总统)Happiness lies not in the mere possession of money; it lies in the joy of achievement, in the thrill of creative effort. 幸福不在于拥有金钱,而在于获得成就时的喜悦以及产生创造力的激情。
5. 爱迪生Thomas Edison: If you wish to succeed, you should use persistence as your good friend, experiences as your reference, prudence as your brother and hope as your sentry. 如果你希望成功, 当以恒心为良友,以经验为参谋,以谨慎为兄弟,以希望为哨兵。
6. 谚语(proverb):He who does not advance loses ground. 学如逆水行舟,不进则退。
7. 谚语(proverb):Reading is to the mind what exercise to the body. 阅读之于思想,犹如运动之于身体。
二. 谚语格言
1.有志者,事竟成. Nothing is impossible to a willing heart./Where there is a will there is a way.
一息若存,希望不灭。Where there is life there is hope.
2.千里之行,始于足下. The longest journey begins with the first step.
3.积少成多. Every little helps.
4.满招损,谦受益. Pride hurts, modesty benefits.
5.世上唯有贫穷可以不劳而获. Nothing is to be got without pain but poverty.
6.伟业非一日之功/冰冻三尺非一日之寒. Rome was not built in a day.
7.一寸光阴一寸金,寸今难买寸光阴. Lost years are worse than lost dollars.
8.自助者天助. God helps those who help themselves.
9.欲速则不达. More haste, less speed.
11.好的开端是成功的一半.Well begun is half done.
13.成功源于勤奋.Industry is the parent of success.
14.英雄所见略同.Great minds think alike.
15.熟能生巧.Practice makes perfect.
17.滴水穿石.Little stone fell great oaks.
18.前事不忘,后事之师.The remembrance of the past is the teacher of the future.
19.君子之交淡如水.A hedge between keeps friendship green.
20.机不可失,时不再来.Take time while time is, for time will be away.
21.集思广益.Two heads are better than one.
22.未雨绸缪.Provide for a rainy day.
23.真金不怕火炼.True blue will never stain.
24.必须相信自己,这是成功的秘诀.You have to believe in yourself. That's the secret of success.
34.知识就是力量.Knowledge is power.
35.金钱不是万能的.Money is not everything.
36.时不我待.Time and tide wait no man.
37.少壮不努力,老大徒伤悲.A young idler, an old beggar.
38.趁热打铁.Strike while the iron is hot.
39.天生我才必有用.Every man has his price.
41.世上无难事,只要肯登攀.Nothing is impossible to a willing heart.
46.众人拾柴火焰高.Many hands make light work.
48.没有付出,就没有收获.No pain(s), no gain(s).
49.不进则退.Not to advance is to go back.
50. 勇者无惧.No way is impossible to courage.
53. 路漫漫其修远兮,吾将上下而求索. My journey is long and winding, I will keep on exploring my way far and wide.
60.细节决定成败.Details is the key to success.
