Welcome Unit - 1 -
Unit 1 Teenage life - 3 -
Unit 2 Travelling around - 5 -
Unit 3 Sports and fitness - 8 -
Unit 4 Natural disasters - 12 -
Unit 5 Languages around the world - 15 -
Welcome Unit
本单元的写作任务是应用文类别中的“学生自我介绍”写作。在写作时需要注意的是,要对个人信息进行筛选,分好主要点和次要点,不能一味地把自己的所有信息都放在作文中。
一、基本结构
1.第一部分——学生的基本信息。
2.第二部分——学习生活的趣事或难题。
3.第三部分——朋友相处情况。(还可以写关于家庭方面的内容。)
二、注意事项
1.写作文体:自我介绍写作属于应用文。
2.主体时态:文章通常以一般现在时为主,也可以根据需要适当使用其他时态。
3.主体人称:第一人称。
一、开头常用语
1.May I introduce myself? My name is ...
我来自我介绍一下吧,我叫……
2.Attention! A teenage boy is coming to you.
注意!一个青少年男孩正向你走来。
3.Hi! I'm come from ... High School.
你好!我是来自……高中。
二、正文常用语
1.When I was 15, I weighted 100kg.
我15岁时,体重达到了100公斤。
2.A strange, quiet girl.
一个古怪、寡言的女孩。
3.I like playing team sports such as football and rugby.
我喜欢玩足球、橄榄球之类的团队运动项目。
4.square up to sb./sth.
勇敢地面对某人/某事
三、结尾常用语
1.All in all ...
总而言之……
2.Last but not least ...
最后一个,但并不是不重要……
3.We must try our best to study.
我们必须努力学习。
假定你是李华。下学期你将作为交换生(exchange student)去加拿大一所高中学习,住在Lynn家里。请给Lynn写一封邮件,内容包括:
1.介绍自己;
2.告知到达时间;
3.询问应做何准备。
注意:1.词数80左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
[精彩范文]
Dear Lynn,
I'm Li Hua, an exchange student from China. Glad to know that I'll be staying with your family while studying at a local senior high school. Learning this information, I feel extraordinarily excited because I can have the chance to communicate with you natives. I will arrive in Toronto on August 20th and get to your place late that afternoon. I wonder if you could give me some advice so that I can get myself better prepared for my stay in Canada.
Looking forward to seeing you.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
总评 该作文覆盖了所有的内容要点:作了自我介绍,有了到达时间并询问准备事项;全文无任何语法错误,而且准确使用了较复杂的语法结构和难度较大的词汇;并且有效使用了语句间的连接成分,全文结构紧凑。
[亮点呈现]
Learning this information, I feel extraordinarily excited中非谓语动词的使用使得文章言简意赅;I wonder if you could give me some advice so that I can get myself better prepared for my stay in Canada. 一句中宾语从句和结果状语从句的使用使得句式多样化,文章生动而流畅,体现了作者驾驭句式的能力。
Unit 1 Teenage life
本单元的写作任务是应用文类别中的“建议信”。建议信是就某件事情向收信人提出建议或给出忠告。有可能是写给个人的,也有可能是写给某个机构或组织的。而高考英语试题中书面表达一般都要求写私人信件,私人信件是指亲朋好友或同事之间的来往信件,通常包括五部分,即信头、称呼、正文、结束语和签名。
一、基本结构
1.开头(beginning)——开门见山,向对方陈述自己的观点(state your idea)。
2.主体(body)——对所提出的问题进行分析并说明理由,接着提出自己的建议(reasons and suggestions)。
3.结尾(ending)——呼应开头,重申观点(restate your opinion)。
二、注意事项
1.写作文体:建议信属于应用文,但高考中一般都会给出书信的格式。
2.主体时态:文章通常以一般现在时和一般将来时为主,也可以根据需要适当使用其他时态。
3.主体人称:由于是给对方提建议,所以人称主要为第一人称和第二人称。
一、开头常用语
1.Thank you very much for your letter!
来信已收到,甚为感谢!
2.I know you are now having trouble communicating with others, and you may often feel lonely.
我知道你现在在与人交流方面有些麻烦,你也可能经常感到孤独。
3.I'm glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on ....
很高兴收到你就……征求建议的来信。
4.Here are some tips/a few suggestions to help you.
这里是对你有帮助的一些建议。
二、正文常用语
1.I suggest you do ...
我建议你做……
2.I think you should ...
我认为你应该……
3.I'm sure you will ...
我认为你会……
4.As far as I am concerned/In my opinion, you should ...
就我而言/在我看来,你应该……
三、结尾常用语
1.Thanks for reading my letter. I do hope you will consider my suggestions.
谢谢你看我的信。我希望你会考虑我的建议。
2.I believe that if you follow my advice, you'll get along well with your classmates.
我相信,如果你听从我的建议,你会和同学们相处得很好。
3.I hope you will find these suggestions practical/useful/helpful.
我希望你会发现这些建议实用/有用。
假设你是李华,你的英国朋友Susan在交友方面有些困难。请根据下面提示给她写一封信。
1.要交朋友首先要做一个朋友;
2.要和朋友同甘共苦;患难之中的朋友才是真朋友;
3.友谊需要时间和投入。
注意:1.词数100左右;
2.开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Dear Susan,
Yours,
Li Hua
[精彩范文]
Dear Susan,
I am sorry to know that you are having trouble in making friends. However, the situation is easy to change if you take my advice. Here are some tips to help you.
To begin with, why not be a friend first if you want to make friends? In addition,wouldn't it be a good idea if you share happiness and sorrow with your friend? Just as a saying goes, “A friend in need is a friend indeed.” Last but not least, it would be a good idea if you put your heart into making friends. It is wellknown to us all that friendship calls for time and effort.
I hope you will find these ideas useful.
Yours,
Li Hua
总评 本文作者经过精巧的构思,设计了写作的切入点,能够用简洁明快的语言囊括试题中要求表达的所有信息。语言表达灵活,不是单纯地罗列题干所要求的几个注意事项。内容连贯自然,条理清楚,结构清晰,灵活地使用了连接词和过渡语;语言诚恳而且正式,完全符合信件的格式。全文体现了作者较强的语言运用能力。
[亮点呈现]
(1)灵活准确地使用大量短语:have trouble in doing sth. “做某事有麻烦(困难)”;take one's advice “采纳某人的建议”;to begin with “首先,起初”; in addition “另外,除此之外”;last but not least “最后,但同样重要的”;put one's heart into “全身心地投入”,这体现了作者深厚的语言功底。
(2)Just as a saying goes, “A friend in need is a friend indeed.” 此谚语运用地道、准确。
(3)第二段多处使用if引导的条件状语从句,使句式结构复杂多变。
Unit 2 Travelling around
本单元的写作任务是应用文类别中的“电子邮件”。电子邮件的格式和普通信件一样,通常包括五部分,即信头、称呼、正文、结束语和签名。高考中邮件的信头通常不用写出,只需写出其他部分即可。其中,邮件的正文是重中之重。
一、基本结构
介绍旅游计划的电子邮件内容一般包括以下几部分内容:
1.第一部分——旅游目的地和出行时间;
2.第二部分——选择目的地的原因;
3.第三部分——旅行中的活动安排。(还可以写关于旅游费用、同行者等内容。)
二、注意事项
1.写作文体:电子邮件属于应用文,但高考中一般都会给出电子邮件的格式。
2.主体时态:文章通常以一般现在时和一般将来时为主,也可以根据需要适当使用其他时态。
3.主体人称:主要为第一人称和第二人称。
一、开头常用语
1.I'm writing to tell you something about my plans for the coming summer holidays.
我写信是想告诉你关于我接下来的暑假的计划。
2.I have an exciting travelling plan to share with you.
我想和你分享一个令人兴奋的旅行计划。
二、正文常用语
1.It is scheduled to take place on ...
计划在……
2.I prefer to go to ... because ...
我更想去……因为……
3.First, I'm going to ...
首先,我打算……
4.I plan to go to ...
我计划去……
5.The trip will last X days.
旅行将持续X天。
6.The X-day trip costs about ...
为期X天的旅行大概花费……
7.I think this trip sounds really exciting.
我觉得这次旅行听起来很让人兴奋。
三、结尾常用语
1.Looking forward to hearing from you.
期待收到你的来信。
2.Looking forward to your early reply.
期待你尽快回复。
3.Do you have any advice?
你有什么建议吗?
4.Would you like to join me?
你想和我一起去吗?
5.We will have a great time.
我们会玩得很开心。
假定你是李华,你打算和妈妈一起去度假。请给你的英国笔友John写一封电子邮件,告诉他你们的度假方案并征求意见。内容包括:
1.出行时间;
2.目的地及选择此处的原因;
3.拟定的活动安排;
4.费用问题。
注意:1.词数80左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
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Dear John,
I've looked at several possible places where I can go on holiday together with my mom. We prefer to go to the South Island in New Zealand because both of us have never been there before. We can explore the forests and walk along the beach, enjoying the natural beauty. We also plan to taste the traditional food.
We plan to take the trip during the first week of October. The 7-day trip costs about 7,000 yuan per person. But my mom only wants to spend 3,000 yuan for each. Anyhow, I think this trip sounds really exciting and my mom likes it very much! Should we book it? Any advice? Please let me know.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
总评 本文用简洁明快的语言覆盖了试题中要求表达的所有信息。同时语言表达灵活,内容连贯,条理清楚;灵活地使用了连接词和过渡语。全文体现了作者较强的语言运用能力。
[亮点呈现]
(1)本文应用了较丰富的语法结构:定语从句where I can go on holiday together with my mom的使用,非谓语动词enjoying的使用等。
(2)较多的高级词汇及短语,如:prefer to, explore, natural beauty, taste, sound等。
Unit 3 Sports and fitness
本单元的写作任务是读后续写中的“健康故事”主题。读后续写是阅读理解和书面表达的沟通桥梁。读后续写考查的是学生在阅读文章的基础上,分析文章的逻辑,运用准确丰富的语言,展现创造力和想象力。
一、解题步骤
读后续写一般遵循以下四个解题步骤:
1.准确理解材料,理清人物事件。
2.根据段落开头语,确定续写方向。
3.根据画线词语,确定续写细节。
4.调整写作语言,完成读后续写。
二、注意事项
1.仔细揣摩原材料作者所表达的意图和主题。注意前后照应,注意隐含的情感因素。
2.一定要注意与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接。千万不可忽略所提供的段落首句的而肆意创作。
3.切忌大篇幅对白;应尽可能巧妙地设置情节,多关注动作描写和心理描述。
4.在完成续写后,务必用下划线标出所用上的关键词语;不要因此而失分。
一、开头常用语
1.People are beginning to attach much more importance to their health these days than ever before.
现在人们开始比以往任何时候都更加重视自己的健康。
2.In current society, people have known the importance of keeping healthy and good life habit.
在当今社会,人们已经意识到健康和良好生活习惯的重要性。
3.When it comes to heath, everybody has his own way to keep healthy, doing exercise, keeping a balanced diet, etc.
说到健康,每个人都有自己的方式来保持健康,锻炼身体,保持均衡的饮食等等。
二、正文常用语
1.To begin with, exercise is the most important factor. Doing exercise can not only build people's body but also relax themselves.
首先,锻炼是最重要的因素。锻炼不仅可以保持良好的身体健康也可以放松自己。
2.Regular exercise strengthens our hearts and lungs. In addition, it prevents us from putting on weight.
有规律的运动能强壮我们的心脏和肺。此外还能防止我们增加体重。
3.It is also necessary to keep a good diet. There is a saying, “An apple a day keeps the doctor away.”
还必须保持一个良好的饮食习惯。俗话说,“一天一苹果,医生远离我。”
4.Avoid foods with lots of sugar and fat. Eat plenty of high protein foods, vegetables and fruits.
避免高糖高脂肪的食物。多吃高蛋白食物、蔬菜和水果。
5.We should get proper amount of sleep, because without enough sleep, we will often feel tired and irritable.
我们应该保持适量的睡眠,因为没有足够的睡眠,我们会经常感到疲倦和易怒。
三、结尾常用语
1.So if you keep those ways you will be more and more healthy.
因此如果你能保持这种方式,你会越来越健康。
2.I think a strong will is necessary if we want to keep healthy.
我认为如果想要健康,强大的意愿是必须的。
3.We have to get rid of those bad habits that damage our health, such as drinking and smoking.
我们必须戒掉那些损害我们健康的坏习惯,比如喝酒和抽烟。
4.Last but not least, always keeping a good mood can make half the work with double results.
最后但并非最不重要的是要经常保持一个好心情,这样做起事来才可以事半功倍。
5.If you really love life, follow these suggestions and start a healthy lifestyle.
如果你真的热爱生活,那就遵循这些建议,开始健康的生活方式吧。
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
Michelle was 8 years old when she heard her mom and dad talking about her little_brother Jack, now, only an infant (婴儿). He was very sick and they were completely out of money. Only a very costly operation could save Jack now, but there was no one to whom they could turn for the money needed. She heard her daddy say to her tearful mom, “Only a miracle can save him now.”
Hearing the words, Michelle went to her bedroom and took all the coins from her little money box. After counting the coins three times, she slipped out of the back door and made her way to the_drug_store 6 blocks away ...
She waited for a long time before the pharmacist (药剂师) turned around and asked her, “And what do you want?”
“Well, it's about my brother,” Michelle answered, “he's really really sick. And I want to buy a miracle.”
“I beg your pardon?” said the pharmacist.
“His name is Jack. And he has something very bad growing inside his body. And my daddy says only a miracle can save him now. So how much does a miracle cost?”
“We don't sell miracles here, little_girl. I am sorry. But I can't help you.” The pharmacist said.
“Listen, I have the money to pay for it.” With these words, Michelle poured out all the coins from her pocket.
At this time, a well-dressed_man behind Michelle stooped down and asked the little girl, “I am selling the miracle you want. Tell me how much money you have.”
“One_dollar_and_eleven_cents.” Michelle answered in a_low_voice,_“That's all the money I have. But I can get some more if I need to.”
“Well,” smiled the man, “a dollar and eleven cents. The_exact_price of a miracle for you little brother. Show me the place where your brother lives.”
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
Holding the man's hand firmly, Michelle took him home.
Paragraph 2:
When asked why he chose to help the family, the man detailed,
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Paragraph 1:
Holding the man's hand firmly, Michelle took him home. The little_girl walked in such a hurry that she even forgot to introduce herself to the man. Her parents were too surprised to believe their eyes. That well-dressed_man turned out to be a surgeon, specializing in neural surgery. Later, the little_brother was taken away. The operation was completed with payment of one_dollar_and_eleven_cents. And it wasn't long before Jack was home again and doing well. Michelle was more than happy. Now she knew the_exact_price of a miracle:_one dollar and eleven cents, plus the faith of a little child.
Paragraph 2:
When asked why he chose to help the family, the man detailed, “When I was young myself, I was once in the same situation as the little baby. The little girl reminded me of my own sister. It was she who saved my life. Deeply impressed by her innocence, I was determined to help the family out of trouble. It doesn't matter how much money she actually had with her; what matters is her faith, a faith that miracles do exist.”
总评 原文主要讲述了小女孩的弟弟病重,因家贫而无法救治。她听父母说只有奇迹可以救弟弟,于是天真地去药店买奇迹,恰好遇见一位陌生人,自称可以把奇迹卖给她。续写部分描述了小女孩的善良纯真带来了奇迹,医生来到她家竭力救治,遵循原文的情节发展,展现了人性的光辉。同时,续写部分与两段所给的开头段落语衔接也十分紧密。
[亮点呈现]
(1)本文运用了非谓语动词(deeply impressed by her innocence)、名词性从句(what matters is her faith)等语法结构,更是准确运用了specializing in, with payment of 等高级短语,使得全文十分出彩。
(2)衔接词Later, And, Now等用来承接故事情节的发展,行文流畅、连贯、自然。
(3)本篇合理地使用了10个关键词语里的8个,符合要求。
Unit 4 Natural disasters
本单元的写作任务是概要写作中的“灾难事件”主题。概要写作是阅读理解和书面表达的沟通桥梁。概要写作考查的是学生在实现自由的思维表达之前,对他人的信息在充分理解的基础上进行大意表达的能力。进行概要写作的短文的体裁一般以说明文和议论文为主。
一、解题步骤
概要写作一般遵循以下三个解题步骤:
1.读懂原文,抓住大意。
2.定位主题句,找到关键。
3.组织语言,转换表达。
二、注意事项
1.概要应包括原文中的主要事实,略去不必要的细节。
2.安排好篇幅的比例,同原文保持协调。
3.注意两点之间的衔接,用适当的关联词语贯通全文。
4.不排斥用原文的某些词句,但不要照搬原文的句子;可对原文句子做一些同义替换。
5.计算词数,注意是否符合规定的词数要求。
一、描写事物的性质或功用
In the passage, the writer introduces ... (对象) to us, especially its ... (性质或功用), from which we know ... (对象带来的好处)
二、问题+解决方法
The passage represents ... (问题) and brings forth several measures/methods to solve the problem, which includes ... (方法1) ... (方法2) ... (方法3)
三、现象+原因/本质
The writer/author represents/introduces ... of ... , because ... (原因1) ... (原因2)
四、灾难事件常用表达
1.Nowadays there have been frequent natural disasters, such as floods, droughts, mud-rock flows, earthquakes, windstorms and the stretching of new deserts. They have destroyed countless homes, and wiped out numerous pieces of fertile land.
当下,自然灾害频发,如洪水,干旱,泥石流,地震,风暴和新的沙漠延伸。它们摧毁了无数的房屋,摧毁了许多肥沃的土地。
2.More and more people become aware that those disasters have much to do with what we have done to the earth.
越来越多的人意识到这些灾害都与我们对地球所作所为有很大关系。
3.The natural disasters are mainly caused by human destruction. Deforestation causes the soil erosion; the chaos of sewage water cause the gradually poor water quality; the disorderly automobile exhaust causes the air pollution; improper disposal of waste causes the environment damage and so on.
自然灾害主要是人为破坏造成的。森林砍伐造成水土流失;污水乱排导致水质逐渐变差;汽车尾气乱排造成空气污染;垃圾处理不当造成环境破坏等。
4.In face of natural disaster, we should timely forecast and do the preventive work.
面对自然灾害,我们要及时进行预测,做好预防工作。
5.In case of emergencies and disasters we should keep our head and try to rely on ourselves to escape from the disasters.
在紧急情况和发生灾难时,我们应该保持头脑清醒,尝试依靠自己逃离灾难。
6.After the disasters, instead of indulging oneself in sadness, one should be positive of life and contribute to the reconstruction of the hometown.
灾后,我们不要沉湎于悲伤之中,应该积极面对生活,为家乡的重建做出贡献。
7.We should unite together, build a sustainable and nature friendly society, making the world a better place.
我们应该团结起来,建设一个可持续的、自然友好型社会,让世界变得更美好。
8.The earth is our only home. It is urgent for us to stop damaging it, and to do our best to protect it, for we have nowhere to go and survive except where we are now.
地球是我们唯一的家园。因此,当务之急就是停止破坏它,并尽力保护它,因为除了我们现在生存的地方,我们已经无处可去。
阅读下面短文,根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。
Speed is very important in avalanche (雪崩) rescues. There will be narrow chances to escape if a skier is buried for 30 minutes or more. Now that 30 minutes can mean the difference between life and death for a skier lost on a snowy mountain, most people would depend on lifesaving dogs.
Noble works as a rescue team member in a vacation land, California. He tells us, “Dogs run fastest when an accident happens.” His partner Wylee, a lifesaving dog, can search an accident scene the size of a football field. It only needs 5 to 10 minutes. However, 5 rescue team members have to spend a couple of hours in the same area.
Apart from its excellent speed, Noble chooses Wylee as his partner partly because it weighs only about half what other kinds of dogs weigh. Rescue team members have to carry their dogs to search sites in addition to carrying 60pound backpacks with food, water and other equipment. The dogs need the lift so that don't get tired before they start working.
There aren't adequate data on how often dogs take part in avalanche searches or how often they are able to help local people in danger. But the dogs don't save that many people. That's because there aren't that many to save. A quarter of people in danger die from serious injuries before the snow stops moving. Of those buried who weren't killed by injuries, half die within 20 minutes. If there is a chance of rescue, though, the dogs also cut search time for the remains.
Erica Mueller, a famous director, wanted to see how the lifesaving dogs worked, so she volunteered to spend part of an hour in a roomy snow cave waiting to be found. She was armed with a radio and was wearing several layers to stay warm. After being rescued by Wylee, she said, “I can't talk like a survivor, but it was definitely a cool way to see how well trained those dogs are.”
[精彩范文]
Lifesaving dogs are of vital importance and help in avalanche rescues due to their excellent speed. (要点1) In addition, another advantage of lifesaving dogs is their light weight. (要点2) Nonetheless, the number of people rescued was not large owing to serious injuries and limited time. (要点3) However, through an experiment, a famous director Erica Mueller, spoke highly of the lifesaving dogs in avalanche rescues. (要点4)
总评 该作文准确把握了文中的四个要点,无一遗漏或偏差,略去了不必要的细节信息。同时语法结构运用准确、词汇运用和同义词转换恰当丰富、语言概括精炼到位。
[亮点呈现]
(1)连接词运用准确恰当。要点1和要点2为并列关系,用In addition连接;要点2和要点3之间为转折关系,用Nonetheless连接;要点4和要点3之间也是转折关系,为避免重复,用However来表示转折。
(2)采用同义替换、语义转换等进行灵活准确的表达。如用of vital importance替换very important;将save改为rescue;用speak highly of来肯定搜救犬的表现。
Unit 5 Languages around the world
本单元的写作任务是应用文中的“博客”。英文名为Blog,为Web和 Log的合成词。博客主要是使用特定的软件,在网络上出版、发表和张贴个人文章。博客的内容可以是个人纯粹的想法和心得,包括你对时事新闻、国家大事的个人看法等,也可以是在基于某一主题或在某一领域由一群人集体创作的内容。
一、基本结构
分享英语学习建议的博客一般包括以下几部分内容:
1.第一部分——陈述此篇博客的主题。
2.第二部分——具体的英语学习建议。
3.第三部分——对整篇博客内容的总结或表达相关祝愿。
二、注意事项
1.写作文体:博客属于应用文。
2.主体时态:文章通常以一般现在时和一般将来时为主,也可以根据需要适当使用其他时态。
3.主体人称:人称主要为第一人称和第二人称。
一、开头常用语
1.Learning a language is a gradual process—it does not happen overnight.
学习一门语言是一个循序渐进的过程——一夜之间学不好语言。
2.English is the most important language in the world so we should learn it well.
英语是世界上最重要的语言之一,因此我们应该学好它。
二、正文常用语
1.Find friends to study and speak with. Learning English together can be very encouraging.
和朋友一起学习,一起对话。一起学英语会使你备受鼓舞。
2.Choose learning materials that relate to what you are interested in. Being interested in the subject will make learning more enjoyable—thus more effective.
选择你感兴趣的学习材料。有意思的主题可以让你学得更愉悦——效率随之更高。
3.The Internet is the most exciting, unlimited English resource that anyone could imagine and it is right at your finger tips.
网络是最令人兴奋且不受的英语学习资源,一切都触手可及。
三、结尾常用语
1.Be patient with yourself. Remember learning is a process—speaking a language well takes time. It is not a computer that is either on or off!
对自己有耐心一点。记住,学习是一个过程——说好一门语言是需要时间的,它可不像一台说开就开,说关就关的电脑!
2.Rome was not built in a day. The same goes for English study, which is a long and difficult journey for all the learners.
罗马非一日建成,英语学习也是如此,对于学习者来说是一个漫长和艰难的旅程。
3.Be patient and persistent, especially in the initial period of study when all of the effort seems to be with no result, do believe in that we will see the fruit of our hard work after the suffering.
耐心和坚持,特别是在学习的初期阶段,当所有的努力似乎都没有回报的时候。我们要相信,苦难过后,我们会看到努力学习的成果。
4.Practice makes perfect.
熟能生巧。
假定你是李华,你班里有些同学在英语学习上有些困难。写一篇博客,提出一些英语学习建议,内容要点如下:
1.收听英语节目;
2.看英语电视节目和电影;
3.多读,多讲,多练。
注意:1.词数80左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
[精彩范文]
I know some classmates have trouble in learning English. Don't worry, here are some advice for your reference.
First, if you want to improve your listening ability, you may listen to some tapes and radio programs in English. You can also watch English TV programs or films, which is very helpful. Last but not least, try to read aloud and practice speaking English.I'm sure the more you practice, the better you'll speak.
I believe you'll make great progress following the above advice.
总评 本文结构清晰,条理清楚,内容涵盖了题目中要求表达的所有信息,同时在遣词造句方面,使用了多样且准确的表达,体现了作者的语言运用能力。
[亮点呈现]
(1)句型多样,非性定语从句which is very helpful和比较级句型the more ... the better ... 的运用,使文章句式结构复杂多变。
(2)大量短语、非谓语动词的灵活使用,如have trouble in, for sb.'s reference, make great progress, following the above advice等,这使得句子表达多样化。
(3)连接词的恰当使用使文章条理清楚,first, also, last but not least。